托福写作如何避免句式运用单一扣分?合理改写丰富你的句子水平

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摘要:托福写作中考生需要关注语法问题,很多同学写出来的句子虽然能够读得懂,但其实在native speaker看来都是相当别扭的,一看就是chinglish的感觉。而想要写出地道的句子,考生就需要在语法方面多下功夫。本文将提供托福写作语法选择恰当表达方式的改写实例。(搜“小站托福”公众号,回复关键词“资讯”,掌握托福最新的考试资讯及留学信息。)

托福写作的语法问题很多同学都有,大家写作时可能不太关心语法,有时候文章就会显得比较生硬,虽然能让人看懂,但读起来总是觉得有些水土不服。想要提升托福写作的语法水平,下面小编会带来一些改写案例供大家参考了解。

托福写作语法表达改写实例分析

选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下,推荐几种考生们在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

1.一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如:

The situation that resulted in my grandfather’s not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather’s not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

My grandfather couldn’t study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.

2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构,例如下面的句子:

There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day.It was hard work for my grandfather.

可以改为:My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

更简洁的句式为:

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

3.把从句改为短语或单词。例如:

Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located 100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

简介的表达方式为:

The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。例如:

In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family.

本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather’s

family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

In the fall, my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,例如下面这句话:

My grandfather didn’t have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.

Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:My grandfather didn’t have time to loiter with his school friends.

6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达,例如:

Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.

两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:

Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses,let alone pay for a university degree.

上述这些托福写作中语法改写的实际案例,不知道大家有没有看懂呢?学会更恰当的表达方式,你的作文得分就能有所提升了。

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