深度对比ACT写作改革前后的区别及满分范文解析

满分范文及解析

官方给出了一篇标题为“Intelligent Machines”的参考范文，列出了6篇范文，分数从1-6分不等。我们认真阅读下面的满分作文，可以发现新的ACT写作，依然有章可循。

标题是针对intelligent machines替代人工的现象展开谈论，并一共以下三个观念：

Perspective1: What we lose with the replacement of people by machines is some part of our own humanity. Even our mundane daily encounters no longer require from us basic courtesy, respect, and tolerance for other people.

Perspective 2: Machines are good at low-skills, repetitive jobs,and at high-speed, extremely precise jobs. In both cases they work better than humans. This efficiency leads to a more prosperous and progressive world for everyone.

Perspective 3: Intelligent machines challenge our long-standingideas about what humans are or can be. This is good because it pushes both humans and machines toward new, unimagined possibilities.

满分作文：

As technology improves, and more and more tasks are completed by machines instead of humans, the question is no longer about what we can do with machines, but rather what we should. Although the usage of machines increases efficiency and our standard of living, it detracts from the value of humanlife.

As machines increasingly perform all our basic tasks, society is able to produce more. The additional production adds material value to oursociety and frees people up from these low-skill tasks. This is in agreement with Perspective Two which claims that this industrialization leads to more prosperity. For example, in the 18th century, short-staple cotton that was grown in the Southern United States required an immense amount of labor inorder to separate the seeds from the fiber to process the cotton to make it marketable.

However, in the mid-19th century, Eli Whitney, an American entrepreneur, invented the cotton gin, which allowed for automation of cotton processing. This machine replaced the need of a large work force for the process and greatly improved production. As a result of the cotton gin,short-staple cotton production skyrocketed, increasing by more than 10 times inthe South while bringing prosperity to the region and setting in motion a new industrial era in America. This is in agreement with Perspective Three, which says that mechanization allows for “unimagined possibilities”. Although there are clearly many advantages to industrialization, there are also some heavy drawbacks.

The replacement of humans by machines leads to the loss of value to human life, an effect that outweighs the material gains of automation. The search to find human tasks that can be performed by machines inevitably leads to comparisons between the human and the machine. If a company executive wants to see if a inventory management team can be replaced by a robotic system, he will compare the two and determine which can do a better job. When this occurs,the people on the team are evaluated not for their worth as human beings, but for their effectiveness at performing a specific function—in essence, as we would evaluate a machine. In a larger sense, when we begin to think about humans in this way, the worth of a person’s life becomes dependent on only what they can do and no longer has any intrinsic value. As Perspective One states,we begin to lose our humanity. This new mindset and way of evaluating people,though seemingly harmless in the workplace, is devastating when it begins topervade a society. If a person is judged only on his or her capability, there is no reason for a person to remain after they have served their function. This would warrant genocide against the elderly and the disabled because their burden on society would not be made up for by any production.

Although the machines may seem to only fulfill the low skill jobsat the moment, there is no barrier to prevent the machines from replacing more.As the machines increase in intelligence, they will replace any tasks done by humans and render us unnecessary and worthless.

Due to the risks of dehumanization, the material benefits of machines are not enough to justify its increasing presence.

一直备考现行版本ACT作文的考生，会发现其实变革后的作文并没有想象中的那么令人恐惧，全然不同。在这篇作文中，有下面几个突出的特征：

1. 观念明晰、视角独立;

2. 例证有力支持观念，且十分集中连接;

3. 与题干观念联络严密，不偏不跑;

4. 言语多样性强。

因此，考试并不是多么可怕的事情~只要大家认真努力备考就一定可以取得理想的成绩！