【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思小作文详解12：线形图

Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天要讲的是小作文——线型图。图形如下：

在写作之前，Simon说，雅思考官说在Task1作文中学生最常犯的一个错误就是，there is overview.也就是说，按照Simon建议的段落结构，应该在第二段写overview，即对整个图表的一个大致总结。So what makes a good overview? Simon给出的建议是：

· An overview is simply a summary of the main things you can see.(overview是对你能看到的信息的简单总结)

· Because the overview is so important, I recommend putting it at the beginning of your essay, just after the introduction sentence.(因为overview太重要了，我建议把它放到第二段)

· I write two overview sentences. A one-sentence overview isn't really enough.(我通常写两句话，一句是不够的)

· Try not to include specific numbers in the overview. Save the specifics for later paragraphs.(试图不要在overview中包含具体数字，而在后面的段落中表达清楚)

· Look at the 'big picture' e.g. the overall change from the first year to the last year (if years are shown on the chart), the differences between whole categories rather than single numbers, or the total number of stages in a process.(着重描述大局，如整体变化趋势，所有各类的比较，或流程图中所有的阶段)

接下来为大家带来Simon的example overview，他要求大家，analyse them carefully, and practise writing your own overviews in the same way. Let's look at an example overview of the graph below:

My overview:

Overall, car ownership in Britain increased between 1971 and 2007. In particular, the number of households with two cars rose, while the number of households without a car fell.

Analysis:

· Notice that I didn't include any specific numbers. Save the details for later.

· The first sentence describes the "big picture". The first thing I did was look at all 4 lines and the whole period. I noticed that there was an overall trend towards people having more cars (the word 'ownership' came from the question). Most students tend to miss this kind of general observation.

· The second sentence highlights the biggest changes over the whole period. With these 2 sentences, I've definitely summarised the main features of the graph.

以上便是今天要讲的内容。大家按照Simon的指示来写一下今天的作文任务吧！

完整范文：

The line graph compares the percentage of people in three countries who used the Internet between 1999 and 2009.

It is clear that the proportion of the population who used the Internet increased in each country over the period shown. Overall, a much larger percentage of Canadians and Americans had access to the Internet in comparison with Mexicans, and Canada experienced the fastest growth in Internet usage.

In 1999, the proportion of people using the Internet in the USA was about 20%. The figures for Canada and Mexico were lower, at about 10% and 5% respectively. In 2005, Internet usage in both the USA and Canada rose to around 70% of the population, while the figure for Mexico reached just over 25%.

By 2009, the percentage of Internet users was highest in Canada. Almost 100% of Canadians used the Internet, compared to about 80% of Americans and only 40% of Mexicans.

今天先到这儿，下期见！

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