【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解6：道路安全

Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！

今天带来一篇大作文，题目是：

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

从这道题目可以看出，这篇文章是属于大作文四种类型中的Discussion opinion。Simon把大作文分成四种类型，分别是：

Here are the four types of question:

1. Opinion

2. Discussion opinion

3. Problem solution

4. 2-part question

针对不同类型，大家需要记住的要点是：

1. An 'opinion' question asks for your view, not the views of other people, and you don't have to give both sides of the argument. Just make your opinion clear in the introduction, then explain it in the rest of the essay.

Opinion类是询问你的观点，而不是其他人的观点，所以你不必给出双方论据。只需在Introduction段落中澄清自己的观点，然后在后面解释就可以了。

2. A 'discussion' question requires you to write about both sides of the argument, and you should write a similar amount for each view. If the question also asks for your opinion, you don't need an extra paragraph. Just make it clear in the introduction and conclusion which of the two views you agree with.

Discussion类要求你写出双方观点，双方字数相近，不要偏颇。如果问题中有征询你的意见，你无需另起一段，只需在首尾段中陈述即可。

3. Type 3 is easy. Simply write a paragraph explaining the problem(s) and a paragraph explaining the solution(s). Some questions ask about 'causes' or 'effects': these would be part of the 'problem' paragraph.

Problem Solution类很简单。主体段落只需一段解释问题一段给出解决方案即可。有些问题会问到“起因”或“影响”，这些只需写进“problem”段落。

4. For type 4, just answer the two questions. Write one paragraph about each.

2-part question类，只需主体段每段各回答一个问题即可。

这四种类型都可以用Simon的4段式结构来写，但是不同类型的文章每个段落内容会有所不同。小站老师提醒大家在写作的时候，首先要先看好题目类型，再选择合适的段落结构进行写作。

现在贴出满分范文

People have differing views with regard to the question of how to make our roads safer. In my view, both punishments and a range of other measures can be used together to promote better driving habits.

On the one hand, strict punishments can certainly help to encourage people to drive more safely. Penalties for dangerous drivers can act as a deterrent, meaning that people avoid repeating the same offence. There are various types of driving penalty, such as small fines, licence suspension, driver awareness courses, and even prison sentences. The aim of these punishments is to show dangerous drivers that their actions have negative consequences. As a result, we would hope that drivers become more disciplined and alert, and that they follow the rules more carefully.

On the other hand, I believe that safe driving can be promoted in several different ways that do not punish drivers. Firstly, it is vitally important to educate people properly before they start to drive, and this could be done in schools or even as part of an extended or more difficult driving test. Secondly, more attention could be paid to safe road design. For example, signs can be used to warn people, speed bumps and road bends can be added to calm traffic, and speed cameras can help to deter people from driving too quickly. Finally, governments or local councils could reduce road accidents by investing in better public transport, which would mean that fewer people would need to travel by car.

In conclusion, while punishments can help to prevent bad driving, I believe that other road safety measures should also be introduced.

(269 words, band 9)

词汇总结：

deterrent:阻碍物，英文释意”sth that deters”，deter常和stop作同义替换，意为阻止

licence suspension:执照吊销，重点记忆suspension，意为暂时中止

disciplined: 名词discipline变化来的，英文释意”obeying the rules”,

alert:警觉的，可理解为”watchful”

vitally:至关重要的

investing in:投资于，注意介词搭配in

今天先到这里，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

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